Saturday, June 18, 2005

liquid oozing out
of you into my inches
soothing my sores,
taking me over and
pasting to my skin
the essence of
your soul.
inside, vibrations
heat and intensify
shooting, at the speed
of sound from within
my core, surrounding
each of my organs
with a deep layer of
tingly denseness,
boiling them
so sublime.

17 Comments:

Blogger . : A : . said...

I like the graphic nature of this post. It is raw and intense.

2:34 AM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

phew!!!
hot!!!
:)

4:53 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Yeah, wild !

12:08 PM  
Blogger DeeM said...

Hi guys, thanks!
This was inspired by the sound of someone's voice.
Get your mind out of the gutter! ;)

1:10 PM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

lol, i have a filthy imagination, pardon me! :)

1:19 PM  
Blogger DeeM said...

haha. Doesn't everyone, really? I most definitely do too.

1:30 PM  
Blogger stella said...

so hot...my mind is still in the gutter ;)

8:02 PM  
Blogger Lorena said...

wow i agree with all HOT :)
very fluid, i love it!

10:14 PM  
Blogger Anonymous Poet said...

Is this FDA-approved? It sounds potent.

. . . "boling them to sublime." Now there is a phrase I haven't heard before. . . . Very creative . . . in an ominous sort of way.

11:54 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Wow, I'm jealous of him! You are incredibly poetically descriptive.

1:26 AM  
Blogger CC said...

Ok, I think I'm blushing. Intense.

3:57 AM  
Blogger DeeM said...

Now I'm the one blushing. Yes, it's FDA approved and ready for mass marketing.
Don't be jealous neel!
Thanks all, for taking time to comment. You guys really inspire me. :)

9:38 AM  
Blogger Jaxe said...

Whew... between all the 'liquid' 'sore's , and 'boiling' , I thought I was back in the clinic after my bachelor party. Whew... *shudders*

No, seriously, very tasty. I really enjoy how you choose your words, always so ambiguous, leading us to a point where we have to interpret it with our own imaginations... Nice work Deem!

7:53 PM  
Blogger DeeM said...

You rock, Jaxe. Many thanks!
Although, I'm not sure about that whole, ending up in the clinic after your bachelor party thing'. That could go many ways. ;)

9:39 AM  
Blogger Jaxe said...

Hehe, it turned out ok, nothing a few Hail Mary's, some penicillin, and new embryonic stem cells couldn't fix! Thanks for your concern though!

12:53 PM  
Blogger :) said...

pretty cool poetry deem :)

2:30 PM  
Blogger DeeM said...

jaxe, no problem. heh heh.

Josh, thanks for visiting, i'll be sure to check out your site. :)

5:02 PM  

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